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How Not Do A Flashback #6
Contributed by KittyKatBlack of 
KittyKatBlack says:
What wrong with it?
1. No cleanup work! The comic hasn't been cleaned up at all, it's just been darkened to look like it's inked.
2. Typewriter font for speech. And no balloons which makes the text go right through images.
3. Horrible proportions. Getting proportions right is hard, but when a character's boobs are 40% of their body weight, it's probably time to re-think your reasonings for making a comic in the first place... And spandex is not super powered battle armor. -_-
4. Cliche use of 'mighty slayer swords' and 'ultimate evil' beings bent on world distruction.
5. Guide Arrows. You don't really need arrows leading the reader on like a 2 year old. Most of the time they can figure out where to look. Arrows are really only needed when you have a complex scene that might cause the reader confusion on where to go.
6. The flashback is pointless. Why is she explaining how she saved the world to someone who doesn't care? Flashbacks should add to to the story and have a reason for being brought up. Don't do a flashback of a useless event.
Saving Graces:
I think the punchline is kinda funny, myself... that's about it.
Phalanx says:
A loverly example of LAME (LAME Anime Manga Eyes). Yeah, yeah, I'm stealing the PHP idea of recursive acronyms. Repeat after me " Drawing big eyes does not make me a Manga-ka"
*wince* This is going to sound really scary to guys, but that girl's back must REALLY ache with that unsupported...
Terotrous says:
Interesting that the "Mighty Slayer Sword" goes "Bonk" instead
of "Slash" or something. Maybe it isn't very sharp.
I think the punchline is pretty funny too.
mcDuffies says:
Forest Gamp syndrome: talking flashbacks to people who are not interested in it. I've seen it quite a few times on web.
Boy, that body is so badly drawn on first panel, it's almost scary. What are arrows with captions for? It's rather obvious what is sword and what is evil. Author might as well put an arrow to empty space and say "empty space". Also, it would be helpful if they said anything during first three panels. At least "Aaaaaaargh!"
And, yeah, we all know this: Normally, 1/100 or less women has that big breasts. If she's a porn star, she might pump them up, though. Since majority of heroines have big breasts, we have two possibilities:
1. All heroines are secretly porn stars and Playboy models.
2. Major coincidence led to the state where every big-breasted women is heroine. Or maybe physical activity causes the growth? (Actually, I think it's opposite)
I'll knock off this subject now.
